Btukfyl

I'm working on homebrewing a number of variant options for the Metamagic options available to Sorcerers, and I need some assistance proofreading the wording on one such option that I'm working on. I am not soliciting feedback on the Balance of this feature right now, and will be ignoring any such feedback.

The following is intended to be a new Metamagic that Sorcerers may learn. Within the context on this homebrew I'm working on, this is intended to be a kind of "Advanced" Metamagic, meaning (among other things) that its complexity is expected to be higher than normal Metamagics.

Despite that concession, however, I am worried that it may still be too wordy or cluttered to be easily understood, and I am looking for feedback to try to make it easier to read or more intuitive to understand. Also, obvious grammatical errors or ambiguities would be good to call out as well.

Artillery Spell

When you cast a spell that has a targeted Area of Effect that isn't yourself, you may spend 5 Sorcery Points to change the spell's range to be equal to your character's visibility range. Then, before the spell comes into effect, the DM will roll four sets of 5d4, in order, and multiply each of these values by a value equal to the distance between you and your target, divided by 15. Then, for each distance:

1. Push the spell's location away from you by this much, parallel to the ground


2. Pull the spell's location towards you by this much, parallel to the ground


3. Move the spell's location to your left by this much


4. Move the spell's location to your right by this much

The intent of this math is to generate a [roughly] normally distributed area within which the spell will land. The entire area within which the spell may land is intended to be a box, centered on your chosen targeted location, with a size equal to twice the distance between yourself and that location. If my math is not producing that kind of distribution, or if the wording of the math doesn't imply that kind of distribution, I'd like to know that as part of the feedback I'm soliciting.

A few additional clarifications (as they come in):

• It should be possible for the caster to accidentally target themselves, though note that it requires pretty astronomically low odds for that to happen (~0.01%-0.20%, depending on the spell's AOE and your distance)


• This affects the spell's range, not its AOE. So a Fireball spell could be launched miles away, but it still only has a radius of 20 feet.


• The facing of this spell's "right" and "left" is based on the direction from the caster to the target.

Here's an example of how this would work, using the rules I've provided, as I intend for them to function:

• The Sorcerer declares "I'm casting Circle of Death on that mountain over there, to try to hit the Assassin's Village"


• The DM rolls 5d4, 4 times: 1+3+2+2+4=12, 2+2+1+1+1=7, 4+4+1+3+1=13, 3+4+4+1+1=13.


• Because the DM has system mastery, they know the village being targeted is 2 miles away, or about 10000 feet.


• Each of these values is multiplied by this distance: 120000, 70000, 130000, 130000, then divided by 15: 8000, 4667, 8667, 8667


• The spell is then adjusted by 8000 feet away from the Sorcerer, then 4667 feet towards them (a net total of 3333 feet away from them), then pushed 8667 feet to the left, then to the right (a net total of 0 feet to the left or right), meaning the spell probably targets a location outside the village.

In total, the spell targeted a location 10000 feet away from the Sorcerer originally, but was instead pushed by this metamagic to a location an additional 3333 feet away, at a total of 13333 feet away.

^{Yes, this is highly inaccurate, even for modest rolls; I am soliciting feedback on the wording and clunkiness of this feature, not the practicality or benefit of this feature.}

There's a simpler way to do this.

What you need is a template in a hexagonal pattern surrounding a central hex. Adapt the scale/size of the hexes to suit the spell, and all you need is two die rolls: 1d20 and 1d6.

The mechanics of your meta magic...

... would look something like this:

1. Spend the meta magic points.



2. 
   

   Succeed or fail on a DC check to hit the center(C). DC set by DM, and I strongly suggest adding a difficulty point for every multiple of the spell's range.

   
   
   

   Example: fireball. Within range (150') there's no problem. DC 10 at twice range(300'/100 yards), DC 11 at three times range, DC 16 at eight times range (1200 feet, 400 yards). Or, if that's too easy, set the DC at 15 for twice the range and add one for each multiple ... test this out in play¹ to see what you want your base DC to be. (How awesome do you want this meta magic to be? At 5 points, it needs to be pretty stout).

   
   



3. If the roll versus DC is successful, hex C has full (normal) effects and all six adjacent hexes had advantage on the saving throw.




4. But if the DC isn't made, you roll d6 to plot the "fall of shot."




5. The square it lands on has normal effects.



6. The two adjacent hexes, advantage on saves


7. The other three hexes, no effect.
   
   Example: I roll a 4. Full effects in hex 4, advantage save in hexes C, 3 and 5 , no effect in hexes 1, 2, and 6.

This is borrowed from a Napoleonics game I played in the 1970's where we used a d6 template for mortar and howitzer fire, as well as a small unit game we played on sand tables for mortar fire, WW II era. It will work in ToTM games if you don't have a grid(per your comment under the question).

Adjustments to fit your situation in game ...

• For a square grid, use d8 rather than d6.




• Alternatively, simply move the "C" to the number rolled on the d6 when
  the DC is missed, and all numbered hexes have advantage on the saving
  throw. That's more like the mortar fire models from our tactical
  games, but the basic answer tried to capture your desired penalty for
  inaccuracy.

This answer is a challenge to the frame of the question based on a point made by T.J.L regarding how overly complicated the proposed metamagic is for this edition. (I agree with that general point).

D&D experience with "fall of shot"

We also used this kind of template for some "fall of shot" for catapults in the 1970's, on a sand table, when we were testing out the OD&D Swords and Spells supplement and various adaptations of that for small, medium, and large combats. The best use case was in siege warfare, from my recollection of our attempts to get it right. (Yes, we used that template because we'd used it in the above mentioned games). It worked well for our purposes, but was not specifically used for spell augmentation. We didn't use "DC" for a hit; we rolled 2d6 for hits and misses, modifications by range for pluses or minuses, and then a 1d6 rolled for "fall of shot" if the catapult was loaded with, basically, a big pile of rocks. (Poor man's grape shot, as it were). DC's weren't a "thing" at that point.

(Look, we didn't have MTV, so we'd spend hours doing stuff like this. It was fun ...)

¹ I can't emphasize enough the need to play test this home brew rather than using theory crafting to try and get the DCs right. We learned from our Swords and Spells variations to run some mock combats on the sand table to see how it would play out before all agreeing on a rule.

Scrap It Completely

This ability is ridiculously complex - it involves four die rolls of five dice, multiplication, and division... and all of this before the DM even rolls any saving throws. This is going to be a nightmare to adjudicate at the table, and no DM I've ever encountered will have decided on enough positioning detail at the kinds of range you'd want to use this ability.

There is no wording that will improve this ability. The excessive complexity makes it entirely antithetical to the game design goals for D&D5E. You're trying to realistically simulate something (artillery scatter) in a game that is not meant to be a reality simulator.

D&D-based Alternative

There's a simpler, more table-playable alternative that gives the high degree of inaccuracy you appear to be looking for without introducing additional mechanics: as it only works with area-of-effect spells, give all the targets advantage on their saving throws. The caster is at such a great distance that he's unable to properly gauge target positions, so some of them have significantly better cover than he'd have wished for. You might even go so far as to change "save for half" spells to "save for nothing" - some targets may not even be inside the intended area at all.

Non D&D Alternative

Wargames with artillery typically involve a "scatter die", a die with a "hit" marker on one or two sides, and arrows on the other sides. Combined with a roll (sometimes based on margin of failure on an attack roll, sometimes purely on the weapon's properties), the arrow and the distance combine to a scatter.

Of course, this works in wargames because said scatter die is standard equipment for playing them. It's not something D&D players without wargaming experience are likely to have, so it's probably not a good idea.

After some struggling, I believe that:

1. Your metamagic does what you want it to (mostly)

I'm not quite sure that the grouping is right, but I'll elaborate that more in the bottom.

2. There's not a more succinct way to state what this metamagic does

You have about a 2 in 3 chance to get within 20% of your target distance on a particular axis; 4 in 9 on both. At 100 feet, that lets fireball work, but long distances are impossible. Even at 1000, being anything less than perfectly aimed is a miss, which to me, is amiss.

If you're just trying to bombard the countryside and you don't care what you hit, I agree with T.J.L.'s answer that D&D doesn't handle that well, but below is my proposal; fewer dice, and less thinking, my motto (well, it could be).

Artillery Spell

When you cast a spell that has a targeted Area of Effect, you may spend 4 Sorcery Points to increase the spell's range by an increment of 500. For each increment increase, the spell has a cumulative 5% chance of missing the target location. In the event of a miss, roll 1d8 to determine the drift direction and 1d100 to determine the number of feet the spell drifts off course.

You may want to play with the number of sorcery points, or the range increments, or drift percentage, etc. But the concept remains the same.

This is fast, achieves a similar effect of "far, but inaccurate", and doesn't require a degree in advanced mathematics.

I would change "spell's location" to "target point." Target is the proper keyword for a spells location.

Also I would specify the subtraction before the multiplication to make the mechanics immediately clear. Talk about the pairs of dice to move the target in two ways, rather than 4 dice that move it 4 ways. (Changes in bold)

Artillery Spell

When you cast a spell that has a targeted Area of
Effect that isn't yourself, you may spend 5 Sorcery Points to change
the spell's range to be equal to your character's visibility range.
Then, before the spell comes into effect, the DM will roll two pairs of 5d4: one moves the target location closer/away from you, one moves it left or right.

For each pair, multiply the difference by a value equal
to the distance between you and your target, divided by 15.
Then, for each difference, change the target location by this amount relative to your position where positive is away/right and negative is closer/left.